What Were You Thinking?

HungLikeJesus · 10-25-2008, 08:39 AM

Explain yourself! What were thinking when you wrote that?

HungLikeJesus · 10-25-2008, 08:44 AM

I wrote this short, spontaneous poem in response to pictures that LabRat posted in the "Close Ups" thread. (The vine pictures are here.)

Quote:

Originally Posted by HungLikeJesus

The traveler ascends to find the vines
entwined like mating snakes,
rapt in hard-wood trees embrace,
and when the cold clear sun does shine,
cast shadows on fair Mary's face,
and lights the intimate landscape of the risen world.

On one level, it's a relatively straight-forward description of the pictures, with the traveler (the photographer, referred to here as Mary) coming from the cave to the wooded area.

She mentioned that it was overcast, but the sun was shining in the pictures of the trees and vines.

"Intimate landscape " is a term (attributed to Eliot Porter) used to describe an outdoor scene without a significant view of the sky. According to Guy Tal:

Quote:

To me an Intimate Landscape is one that falls between grand scenics, drawing their power from sheer enormity and majesty of a subject, and extreme close-ups, relying on magnification of a subject, evoking interest from the mere fact that these sights are not often possible with or apparent to the naked eye.

The pictures change from close-ups in the cave to these more mid-range shots, and from the darkness of the cave to the woods lit by natural sun light.

But the poem is also filled with religious references, including:
* The traveler is on a spiritual journey, beginning in the dark (cave) but is enlightened in the end.
* The intimate landscape and snakes = Garden of Eden
* Jesus on the cross (rapt in hard-wood trees embrace = hung like Jesus), is the traveler that ascends from the cave (i.e. is resurrected).

Other references:

rapt = wrapped, - the vines are wrapped around each other and around the trees.
Also rapt - Origin: 1350–1400; ME (ptp. of rapen to carry off, abduct, rape)
also, The Rapture is a prophesied event in Christian eschatology, in which Christians are instantly taken from the earth to be with Jesus.

The poem also incorporates most of this Medieval English poem (Pity for Mary):

Quote:

Now goth sonne under wod:
Me reweth, Marye, thy faire rode.
Now goth sonne under tree:
Me reweth, Marye, thy sone and thee.

Where:
sonne = sun,
wod = wood = the cross,
reweth = pity,
rode = face, and
sone = son = Jesus

morethanpretty · 10-26-2008, 12:34 AM

I'm not posting it, but when I wrote that erotic story I was thinking about sex.

ZenGum · 10-26-2008, 05:41 AM

You should have been thinking about spelling and grammar. :p

morethanpretty · 10-26-2008, 10:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ZenGum

You should have been thinking about spelling and grammar. :p

Nah that's what auto-correct is for.

Trilby · 10-26-2008, 03:30 PM

I'm always thinking "what choice do I have besides POST QUICK REPLY?

morethanpretty · 10-26-2008, 05:46 PM

"Post Reply", "Go Advanced", or "Quote"?

Aliantha · 10-26-2008, 11:32 PM

I go for post quick reply more often than anything else. Like just now. That's what I'm doing...and of course, that's what I'm thinking about too...as well as Christmas...and Dazza and the kids and our weekend away this weekend...

ZenGum · 10-27-2008, 04:30 AM

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Originally Posted by morethanpretty

Nah that's what auto-correct is for.

That's exactly the kind of thinking that leads to porn writers mixing up crutch, crotch and crouch. Get that shit right.

PUTT KNOT YOU'RE TRUSSED ON SPILL CHECKERS!

morethanpretty · 10-27-2008, 10:55 AM

Porn writers are not the same. Plus I read over it a ton, for editing of course...

LabRat · 10-27-2008, 03:44 PM

Wow. I thought the vines were cool, but don't have the creative mind to put inner feelings into written/spoken word. As a thanks, here's a couple I didn't post.

(It clouded up shortly after those pics were taken. Honest!!)

spudcon · 03-04-2009, 09:04 PM

What were you thinking? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OZDT-FXXf-0

DanaC · 03-05-2009, 04:33 AM

HLJ, I thought that was really interesting. I like the snippet of old english verse.

HungLikeJesus · 03-05-2009, 09:46 AM

Thanks Dana. When spudcon revived this thread, I re-read what I wrote and was somewhat embarrassed. I'm not quite sure why.

10-25-2008, 08:39 AM	#1
HungLikeJesus Only looks like a disaster tourist Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: above 7,000 feet Posts: 7,208	What Were You Thinking? Explain yourself! What were thinking when you wrote that? __________________ Keep Your Bodies Off My Lawn SteveDallas's Random Thread Picker.

10-26-2008, 12:34 AM	#3
morethanpretty Thats "Miss Zipper Neck" to you. Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: little town (but not the littlest) in texas Posts: 2,957	I'm not posting it, but when I wrote that erotic story I was thinking about sex. __________________ Addicts may suck dick for coke, but love came up with the idea to put a dick in there to begin with. -Jack O'Brien

10-26-2008, 05:41 AM	#4
ZenGum Doctor Wtf Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Badelaide, Baustralia Posts: 12,861	You should have been thinking about spelling and grammar. :p __________________ Shut up and hug. MoreThanPretty, Nov 5, 2008. Just because I'm nominally polite, does not make me a pussy. Sundae Girl.

10-26-2008, 03:30 PM	#6
Trilby Slattern of the Swail Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 15,654	I'm always thinking "what choice do I have besides POST QUICK REPLY? __________________ In Barrie's play and novel, the roles of fairies are brief: they are allies to the Lost Boys, the source of fairy dust and ...They are portrayed as dangerous, whimsical and extremely clever but quite hedonistic. "Shall I give you a kiss?" Peter asked and, jerking an acorn button off his coat, solemnly presented it to her. —James Barrie Wimminfolk they be tricksy. - ZenGum

10-26-2008, 05:46 PM	#7
morethanpretty Thats "Miss Zipper Neck" to you. Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: little town (but not the littlest) in texas Posts: 2,957	"Post Reply", "Go Advanced", or "Quote"? __________________ Addicts may suck dick for coke, but love came up with the idea to put a dick in there to begin with. -Jack O'Brien

10-26-2008, 11:32 PM	#8
Aliantha trying hard to be a better person Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Brisbane, Australia Posts: 16,493	I go for post quick reply more often than anything else. Like just now. That's what I'm doing...and of course, that's what I'm thinking about too...as well as Christmas...and Dazza and the kids and our weekend away this weekend... __________________ Kind words are the music of the world. F. W. Faber

10-27-2008, 10:55 AM	#10
morethanpretty Thats "Miss Zipper Neck" to you. Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: little town (but not the littlest) in texas Posts: 2,957	Porn writers are not the same. Plus I read over it a ton, for editing of course... __________________ Addicts may suck dick for coke, but love came up with the idea to put a dick in there to begin with. -Jack O'Brien

10-27-2008, 03:44 PM	#11
LabRat twatfaced two legged bumhole Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 3,143	Wow. I thought the vines were cool, but don't have the creative mind to put inner feelings into written/spoken word. As a thanks, here's a couple I didn't post. (It clouded up shortly after those pics were taken. Honest!!) Attached Images __________________ Strength does not come from how much weight you can lift, or how many miles you can run. It comes from knowing that you set a goal, and rose to the challenge. Strength comes from within.

03-04-2009, 09:04 PM	#12
spudcon Beware of potatoes Join Date: May 2007 Location: Upstate NY, USA Posts: 2,078	What were you thinking? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OZDT-FXXf-0 __________________ "I believe that being despised by the despicable is as good as being admired by the admirable."

03-05-2009, 04:33 AM	#13
DanaC We have to go back, Kate! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Yorkshire Posts: 25,964	HLJ, I thought that was really interesting. I like the snippet of old english verse.

03-05-2009, 09:46 AM	#14
HungLikeJesus Only looks like a disaster tourist Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: above 7,000 feet Posts: 7,208	Thanks Dana. When spudcon revived this thread, I re-read what I wrote and was somewhat embarrassed. I'm not quite sure why. __________________ Keep Your Bodies Off My Lawn SteveDallas's Random Thread Picker.

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