Write a Spontaneous Poem - Page 22

shina · 04-08-2008, 05:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BigV

I don't see any of this defensiveness on my part you mention. Perhaps you could provide a citation? And what exactly am I quick to dispense?

Criticism.

Poetry anyone?

BigV · 04-08-2008, 05:25 PM

Show me where I was quick to dispense criticism, please. I don't see any in this exchange. Perhaps you're thinking of a different thread or a different person.

warch · 04-08-2008, 05:27 PM

Grayed skyline through an edge of glass
A springloaded black desk light cranes to help
My eyes squint and I can feel the tinge
on the right, near the back
move the neck, ear to shoulder
Did that get it?
nah.
still there.

lumberjim · 04-08-2008, 06:37 PM

a trenchcoat smells like rain
puddles splashing silently in my memory
as a child at school i stand in line
the gray day feels like wet heavy pain
we stand in the hallway line so violently
it all just stays the same
rivulets distort, raindrops dot
behind the window pane
eyelids get heavy watching the buses stop
it all melts into evening, night dinner
tv time on the carpet, bed already?
lie awake in the dark until i fade
away into tomorrow and do it again
again
ah gayne

Flint · 04-08-2008, 09:41 PM

I was just fuckin' around. Everybody quit bein' dicks.

monster · 04-08-2008, 11:37 PM

dun dickin'
dun fuckin'
blame flin'.

Sundae · 04-09-2008, 06:05 AM

Last night I dreamed I was svelte in a bikini,
This morning I day-dreamed of Chinese buffet,
This afternoon I'm worrying about speed dating;
Why don't my thoughts match up?

In truth though, I am happy with myself.
I have started to feel my own self-worth;
I am loved for who I am, not just by cats.
My dreams are robust enough to be walked on.

Trilby · 04-09-2008, 07:21 AM

sundae-me likey

BigV · 04-09-2008, 10:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BigV

Show me where I was quick to dispense criticism, please. I don't see any in this exchange. Perhaps you're thinking of a different thread or a different person.

shina:

You got nothing.

shina · 04-09-2008, 11:42 AM

I'll take the high road
And you take the low road
And I'll be in Scotland afore ye.....

DanaC · 04-09-2008, 05:03 PM

Oh ffs, this is the Spontaneous Poem thread people, can we not keep this one free of conflict?

shina · 04-09-2008, 06:09 PM

I'm trying.

Giant Salamander · 04-10-2008, 01:16 AM

Hear the bison as they fall
Tumbling hooves heard through the wall
Pride in every muffled blow
Mangled heap is red and raw

Hear the silence as they thaw
Ecstasy heard through the wall
Air is wet, morning dim
Laughter lost within the maw

Trilby · 04-10-2008, 08:07 AM

you know what? I'm taking two poetry courses this quarter and I'm gonna be in yur thread steelin' yur poims. HA! just TRY to stop me!

(for those of you who are literal moralists, I am kidding. got that? KIDDING)

HungLikeJesus · 04-10-2008, 09:16 AM

I think we should vote for a Poet Laureate of the Cellarnet.

04-08-2008, 05:25 PM	#317
BigV Goon Squad Leader Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Seattle Posts: 27,063	Show me where I was quick to dispense criticism, please. I don't see any in this exchange. Perhaps you're thinking of a different thread or a different person. __________________ Be Just and Fear Not.

04-08-2008, 06:37 PM	#319
lumberjim I can hear my ears Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 25,571	a trenchcoat smells like rain puddles splashing silently in my memory as a child at school i stand in line the gray day feels like wet heavy pain we stand in the hallway line so violently it all just stays the same rivulets distort, raindrops dot behind the window pane eyelids get heavy watching the buses stop it all melts into evening, night dinner tv time on the carpet, bed already? lie awake in the dark until i fade away into tomorrow and do it again again ah gayne __________________ This body holding me reminds me of my own mortality Embrace this moment, remember We are eternal, all this pain is an illusion ~MJKeenan

04-08-2008, 09:41 PM	#320
Flint Snowflake Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Dystopia Posts: 13,136	I was just fuckin' around. Everybody quit bein' dicks. __________________ **************** There's a level of facility that everyone needs to accomplish, and from there it's a matter of deciding for yourself how important ultra-facility is to your expression. ... I found, like Joseph Campbell said, if you just follow whatever gives you a little joy or excitement or awe, then you're on the right track. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Terry Bozzio**

04-08-2008, 11:37 PM	#321
monster I hear them call the tide Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Perpetual Chaos Posts: 30,852	dun dickin' dun fuckin' blame flin'. __________________ The most difficult thing is the decision to act, the rest is merely tenacity Amelia Earhart

04-09-2008, 06:05 AM	#322
Sundae polaroid of perfection Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: West Yorkshire Posts: 24,185	Last night I dreamed I was svelte in a bikini, This morning I day-dreamed of Chinese buffet, This afternoon I'm worrying about speed dating; Why don't my thoughts match up? In truth though, I am happy with myself. I have started to feel my own self-worth; I am loved for who I am, not just by cats. My dreams are robust enough to be walked on. __________________ Life's hard you know, so strike a pose on a Cadillac

04-08-2008, 05:27 PM	#318
warch lurkin old school Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Minnesota Posts: 2,796	Grayed skyline through an edge of glass A springloaded black desk light cranes to help My eyes squint and I can feel the tinge on the right, near the back move the neck, ear to shoulder Did that get it? nah. still there.

04-09-2008, 07:21 AM	#323
Trilby Slattern of the Swail Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 15,654	sundae-me likey __________________ In Barrie's play and novel, the roles of fairies are brief: they are allies to the Lost Boys, the source of fairy dust and ...They are portrayed as dangerous, whimsical and extremely clever but quite hedonistic. "Shall I give you a kiss?" Peter asked and, jerking an acorn button off his coat, solemnly presented it to her. —James Barrie Wimminfolk they be tricksy. - ZenGum

04-09-2008, 11:42 AM	#325
shina Hopeful Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Sammamish, WA Posts: 232	I'll take the high road And you take the low road And I'll be in Scotland afore ye.....

04-09-2008, 05:03 PM	#326
DanaC We have to go back, Kate! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Yorkshire Posts: 25,964	Oh ffs, this is the Spontaneous Poem thread people, can we not keep this one free of conflict?

04-09-2008, 06:09 PM	#327
shina Hopeful Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Sammamish, WA Posts: 232	I'm trying.

04-10-2008, 01:16 AM	#328
Giant Salamander Deity of Dogs Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Austin, TX Posts: 114	Hear the bison as they fall Tumbling hooves heard through the wall Pride in every muffled blow Mangled heap is red and raw Hear the silence as they thaw Ecstasy heard through the wall Air is wet, morning dim Laughter lost within the maw __________________ random artstuff

04-10-2008, 08:07 AM	#329
Trilby Slattern of the Swail Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 15,654	you know what? I'm taking two poetry courses this quarter and I'm gonna be in yur thread steelin' yur poims. HA! just TRY to stop me! (for those of you who are literal moralists, I am kidding. got that? KIDDING) __________________ In Barrie's play and novel, the roles of fairies are brief: they are allies to the Lost Boys, the source of fairy dust and ...They are portrayed as dangerous, whimsical and extremely clever but quite hedonistic. "Shall I give you a kiss?" Peter asked and, jerking an acorn button off his coat, solemnly presented it to her. —James Barrie Wimminfolk they be tricksy. - ZenGum

04-10-2008, 09:16 AM	#330
HungLikeJesus Only looks like a disaster tourist Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: above 7,000 feet Posts: 7,208	I think we should vote for a Poet Laureate of the Cellarnet. __________________ Keep Your Bodies Off My Lawn SteveDallas's Random Thread Picker.

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