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View Poll Results: DID U ENJOYED IT?
YES!! 1 14.29%
NO!!! 4 57.14%
A LITTLE!! 2 28.57%
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Old 10-29-2004, 05:34 AM   #1
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The Last Battle

WELL, MOST PEOPLE TURNED 2 B MORE CRUELLY ARGUMENTATIVE THAN THERE WAS NEED 2 B. ANYWAYS, I HOPE MY THIS ARTICLE WILL SILENCE THEM(A LITTLE). DO READ THIS ATTACHEMENT AND VOTE!
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Old 11-04-2004, 04:20 PM   #2
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I admire you for being so persistent, but you REALLY need someone to edit your work before you post it or submit it anywhere. There are tons of mispellings, incorrect grammar, and most of your sentences don't contain subjects and/or verbs. I am a former editor, and trust me, you need to work on your grammar and spelling before anyone will take your writing seriously. I'm not trying to be mean--I'm just being honest. Sorry!
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Old 11-04-2004, 04:41 PM   #3
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I thought it was the weakest of the Narnia books. Lewis had, by this point, completely abandoned any attempts to write his own story, and was in full-on preachy allegory mode.
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Old 11-04-2004, 04:52 PM   #4
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Mystic, I don't know why you continue to attempt to turn the cellar into a writers' group. It really just isn't, although there are many creative people here, writing and friendly critism is just not a strength of these boards. I don't know what gender you are, but a great women's group can be found here: http://messageboards.ivillage.com/iv-bcpoets
Even if you are a guy, I'm sure they'd welcome you aboard.

By the way, I consider C.S. Lewis's greatest work to have been The Lion, the witch, and the wardrobe . I can still see the illustrations from that book in my mind's eye. Must have been 10 or 12 when I first came across it!
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Old 11-05-2004, 10:52 AM   #5
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Are you from the U.S. Mystic? Is English your first, second, or third language?
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Old 11-12-2004, 07:00 PM   #6
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I no enjoy it long time. for you. twenny dolla.

Sorry, seriously though. Follow Garnets advice.
Also on the left side of your keyboard look for a key just above shift that says caps lock. We all want you to press that key once, and then don't touch it again. OK?

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